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2006/3/12

It is not my fault being pretty!

          Last night I went to supermarket to buy something to eat. Then I saw the nestle coffee are abating and if you spend 30 yuan on them you can be given a red cup. Father have said  he like it sometimes,so I wanted to choose a kind of the nestle coffee in order to pleasure him.

          however the shop assistant who sells nestle coffee saw me and came to my place ,she said she can give me a red cup for present and I need not to buy the coffee.Oh,'But why?' I said. 'you are so beautiful and so tall! I notice you everytime when you come to our supermarket! I like you so much! So,I want to give the red cup to you for free present , that's my pleasure!'

          I am so surprised and  so happy! I paid for all of the goods I choiced and got my presents. By the way,when I got my presents that seller gave me two cups and a set of the beautiful classical cups with two golden yellow spoons!

         Oh,that's was a really happiness day!

         It is not my fault being pretty!

 

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vickyxu发表:
oh,thanks !
 
我只是注意了大概的情节,忘记了语法,时态问题,呵呵,下次注意!
3 月 20 日
"Father have said  he like it sometimes" 这句话的含义不清晰, 另外,时态也有问题, 应该是: my father said that he'd like it.
 
and came to my place 应该改为: came to me
 
she said she can give me a red cup for 改为: she said she could give...
 
 and I need not to buy the coffee 改为: no need for me to buy coffee
 
give the red cup to you for free present 改为 as a free present
 
that's was a really happiness day! 改为: a really happiest day!
 
 
3 月 20 日

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